A silver dish

"Then for the rest of the week Woody [use of alliteration] was busy, had jobs to run, office responsibilities, family responsibilities [repetition of words and ideas]. He lived alone; as did his wife; as did his mistress: everybody in a separate establishment. Since his wife, [use of subject first in the sentence] after fifteen years of separation, had not learned to take care of herself, Woody did her shopping on Fridays, filled her freezer [important details in front, less important details follow making the sentence peculiar]. He had to take her this week to buy shoes. Also, Friday night he always spent with Helen—Helen was his wife de facto [once again, subject comes before important idea]. Saturday he did his big weekly shopping. Saturday night he devoted to Mom and his sisters [repetition with the word Saturday]. So he was too busy to attend to his own feelings except, intermittently, to note to himself, “First Thursday in the grave.” “First Friday [alliteration], and fine weather.” “First Saturday; he’s got to be getting used to it.” Under his breath he occasionally said, “Oh, Pop.”

Overall I noticed that the author tends to arrange sentences like he rearranges his story. First comes the subject of the story, his father. Then comes all these details and repetitions. He sneaks important information out of nowhere. His transitions are sudden, which makes the reader feel like they're on a roller coaster. He tells the story in different bursts of perspective in regards to time. First we are with pop, then he is dead, then we are back with him, and so on.